Took your advice, guys...revised Bikini Driving School

craiglieberman · 06-17-2008, 10:19 PM

Thanks to Bob and others, we focused for this episode on getting a girl with a personality.

Getting her in car reactions was MUCH easier than with past girls and I think it paid off.

Music is still an issue. The parent company won't let us use Nine Inch Nails music as they're already doing that, so I'm playing with remixes of songs, but it still skews techno-ish for younger crowds. Added tech specs and info, per your suggestions.

Are we on the right track?

http://videos.streetfire.net/video/E...ver_166738.htm

Untouchable S4 · 06-17-2008, 10:34 PM

CanuckRS4 · 06-17-2008, 11:08 PM

zqk · 06-17-2008, 11:21 PM

Mirror|rorriM · 06-18-2008, 05:52 AM

Some thoughts:
* It doesn't matter what the car is - watching a windshield wiper and a dash board isn't interesting. Did you actually look at what the camera was going to record before recording that?
* The reaction shot barely had the girl in the frame. Again, did you actually check what the camera was going to record beforehand?
* Use rigid mounts for the cameras on the car. The vibration in this episode made it nearly unwatchable.
* If you're going to use the bimbo as nothing more than a bimbo, at least get a hot one.
* What's up with the random Lime Rock clip?
* The show is in dire need of a host. A quick voiceover which is almost a direct read of the text on the screen, but not quite, isn't very appealing.

MYROCKET_S4 · 06-18-2008, 06:33 AM

RXBG · 06-18-2008, 07:06 AM

the car is cheesy (lambos need to be left stock, practically any mod throws them over the edge into the land of guidos and chicks with pierced clits), and finally, the music is totally incongruent with the rhythm of what is being filmed.

you could clean it up a bit with a tall italian-type of girl that has class and a simple thong bikini (no zebra or camo designs) and then slow down the music a bit.... something like fauxliage or coldplay

Bob W. · 06-18-2008, 07:36 AM

That's the kind of model you need for these. The only thing I would add might be some very brief interview questions with a corner inset 'PIP' during the car wash scene (like you did with the in-car footage)...the questions could be anything, not necessarily car-related. 'where are you from?' etc....the kind of bull**** a guy might ask her if he ran into her at a club or something. This would also give you a chance to make the music quieter in the audio mix.

Kind of sucks about the NIN music. Will they let you use anything from the NIN remix website? Check out remix.nin.com....these are remixes of NIN songs mostly done by fans, and then uploaded to the site. Some are great, many of them aren't. You can also download the raw data files and make your own remixes (if you have someone proficient in Garageband or Ableton Live)....and best of all, it's free!

Bob W. · 06-18-2008, 07:51 AM

the music, ok, it could be better....that's where the personality comes into play.

ToblertheDog · 06-18-2008, 08:12 AM

...it's the content, editing, and overall low production quality.

06-17-2008, 10:19 PM	#1
craiglieberman AudiWorld Senior Member Account #: 111101 Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 619	Took your advice, guys...revised Bikini Driving School Thanks to Bob and others, we focused for this episode on getting a girl with a personality. Getting her in car reactions was MUCH easier than with past girls and I think it paid off. Music is still an issue. The parent company won't let us use Nine Inch Nails music as they're already doing that, so I'm playing with remixes of songs, but it still skews techno-ish for younger crowds. Added tech specs and info, per your suggestions. Are we on the right track? http://videos.streetfire.net/video/E...ver_166738.htm __________________ 2007 Sprint Blue RS4 Nav/Sirius/Milltek Non-res CatBack/Stratmosphere SSK/KW Ver 3 Coilovers/H-Sport Sway Bars/K&N Panel Filter/Bel STi/M40 Blinders/Veil/DeFlapped Coming Soon: Uniden Scanner,Infinity BassLink, PREVIOUS ADVENTURES: 2005 SL600 V12TT 2001 Diablo 6.0VT 2003 Porsche 996TT 1998 Supra TT 850hp 2002 UBER M3 Widebody 1998 Diablo SV 1999 Nissan Skyline GT-R V-Spec 1994 Toyota Supra (yes, the orange one from TF&TF) 1998 Nissan Maxima Supercharged 1996 Impala SS w/N20 1993 Mustang GT 347 Stroker, V-Trim Vortech 544hp VIEW CRAIG'S CARS

06-17-2008, 10:34 PM	#2
Untouchable S4 New Member Account #: 53629 Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 60	Eek, this took a turn for the worse. It's un-watchable now for me...

06-17-2008, 11:08 PM	#3
CanuckRS4 AudiWorld Senior Member Account #: 116812 Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,068	I think i watched at most 30 seconds of it, including the FFWDing

06-17-2008, 11:21 PM	#4
zqk Member Account #: 83316 Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 4,144	the music sucked, all of it __________________

06-18-2008, 05:52 AM	#5
Mirror\|rorriM AudiWorld Expert Account #: 11167 Join Date: Oct 2000 Posts: 25,553	Have you tried actually looking through the cameras before recording? Some thoughts: * It doesn't matter what the car is - watching a windshield wiper and a dash board isn't interesting. Did you actually look at what the camera was going to record before recording that? * The reaction shot barely had the girl in the frame. Again, did you actually check what the camera was going to record beforehand? * Use rigid mounts for the cameras on the car. The vibration in this episode made it nearly unwatchable. * If you're going to use the bimbo as nothing more than a bimbo, at least get a hot one. * What's up with the random Lime Rock clip? * The show is in dire need of a host. A quick voiceover which is almost a direct read of the text on the screen, but not quite, isn't very appealing. __________________ Mirror\|rorriM

06-18-2008, 06:33 AM	#6
MYROCKET_S4 New Member Account #: 100413 Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 316	I love the car wash ending __________________

06-18-2008, 07:06 AM	#7
RXBG AudiWorld Super User Account #: 1145 Join Date: Mar 2000 Posts: 4,243	first of all, the girl is mediocre (a 6.5 at most) the car is cheesy (lambos need to be left stock, practically any mod throws them over the edge into the land of guidos and chicks with pierced clits), and finally, the music is totally incongruent with the rhythm of what is being filmed. you could clean it up a bit with a tall italian-type of girl that has class and a simple thong bikini (no zebra or camo designs) and then slow down the music a bit.... something like fauxliage or coldplay __________________ RXBG Past: A4, TT, S4 Present: R8 V8 pics, A4 3.2Q, Range Rover Sport Supercharged Future: R8 V10, Q1 2010

06-18-2008, 07:36 AM	#8
Bob W. AudiWorld Super User Account #: 414 Join Date: Mar 2000 Posts: 24,323	I think this is the best one yet, good job! That's the kind of model you need for these. The only thing I would add might be some very brief interview questions with a corner inset 'PIP' during the car wash scene (like you did with the in-car footage)...the questions could be anything, not necessarily car-related. 'where are you from?' etc....the kind of bull**** a guy might ask her if he ran into her at a club or something. This would also give you a chance to make the music quieter in the audio mix. Kind of sucks about the NIN music. Will they let you use anything from the NIN remix website? Check out remix.nin.com....these are remixes of NIN songs mostly done by fans, and then uploaded to the site. Some are great, many of them aren't. You can also download the raw data files and make your own remixes (if you have someone proficient in Garageband or Ableton Live)....and best of all, it's free!

06-18-2008, 07:51 AM	#9
Bob W. AudiWorld Super User Account #: 414 Join Date: Mar 2000 Posts: 24,323	disagree 100%...this thing just needs a cute girl with personality, not a mannequin/robot. the music, ok, it could be better....that's where the personality comes into play.

06-18-2008, 08:12 AM	#10
ToblertheDog New Member Account #: 70770 Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 425	The girl or music isn't the main problem here... ...it's the content, editing, and overall low production quality.

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